Problem with Essay:
It looks like the issue is that there isn’t yet a clear problem/causal thesis in place. You do a good job of identifying the topic of technoethics and some of its related concerns, but that isn’t positioned as a problem.
You could revise to position the problem as companies having a lack of technoethics, or you could take one of the concerns (a lack of network security, compromised privacy, or data collection) and use that as your problem.
Once you’ve determined what your problem is, then you’ll want to lay out the causes that have led to that problem. For example, “A lack of corporate technoethics is a problem caused by X, Y, and Z.” You’ll want to back up from the problem and see what factors led to it. The body paragraphs will develop those causes.
This must be written from a I.T. Perspective and is a Causal Analysis Essay.
A causal analysis asks you to examine either the causes of a problem, why the problem has happened, or what factors have led to a particular problem. To write an effective causal analysis essay the thesis and body paragraphs should focus on 2–4 specific causes (i.e., actions, events, thoughts, attitudes, conditions, or decisions) that have led to the problem you have identified. Writing about causes is an important skill in academic, professional, and real-world contexts, and the ability to identify the causes of a problem is essential in persuasive writing. A. Write a causal analysis essay (suggested length of 3–7 pages). In your essay, do the following:
1. Address an appropriate topic.
2. Provide an effective introduction.
3. Provide an appropriate thesis statement that previews two to four causes.
4. Explain the causes of the problem.
5. Provide evidence to support your claim.
6. Provide an effective conclusion.
B. Include at least two academically credible sources in the body of your essay.
1. For your sources, include all in-text citations and references in APA format.
C. Demonstrate professional communication in the content and presentation of your submission.
Competencies: 126.1.1: Grammar, Sentence Structure, and Writing The graduate applies appropriate grammatical rules, sentence structure, and writing conventions. 126.1.2: Rhetoric and Analyzing Writing The graduate selects appropriate rhetorical strategies that improve writing and argumentation. 126.1.3: Writing Style, Citations, and Use of Sources The graduate appropriately uses a given writing style. 126.1.4: Writing and Revision Process The graduate uses appropriate writing and revision strategies. 126.1.5: Working with Sources The graduate integrates credible and relevant sources into written arguments. 126.1.7: Argumentative Writing The graduate composes an appropriate argumentative essay for a given context.
